Formal Letter
Dear Professor Brad,
I am writing this letter as a self-introduction to you. My name is Chua Wei Jie, Nigel and I am a student at the Singapore Institute of Technology (SIT) pursuing my degree in robotics system engineering. In 2020, I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic with a diploma in electronic and computer engineering. Thereafter, I went ahead to complete my National Service where I served my first year as an intelligence trooper. However, due to a service injury, my role was switched to an administrative support assistant in my second year.
During the course of my study at Ngee Ann Polytechnic, I was taught many critical technical skills, which includes soldering, programming, and troubleshooting electronics. I had the opportunity to apply these skills on a project assigned by my internship company in my final year. In addition to this, I also had prior experience working as a part-time technician in a business that specializes in troubleshooting electronics. With these exposures in the industry and a strong interest in technology, it led me to pursue a degree in robotics systems engineering. I find this course relevant and suitable for me as I would be able to put the knowledge and skills I had learnt over the years to good use. That being said, I believe I have more technical and soft skills to learn from this course, which will help pave the route for my future career.
Being a very outspoken person, I am able to communicate my point across the room very effectively, which makes it easier for everyone to understand what I am sharing or presenting. On a contrary, I believe that my poor vocabulary had impacted my grades in the past as I could not produce well-written report writing and essays.
My objectives for this module are to strengthen my essay- and report-writing skills, as well as learn how to apply critical thinking in everyday situations.
In conclusion, I am confident that I will be able to strengthen my areas of weakness and achieve my objectives with your great guidance. I am looking forward to learn from you.
With Regards,
Chua Wei Jie, Nigel
Thank you for sharing with us your job experiences. I don't see anything wrong with your post other than some grammatical errors.
ReplyDeleteOn the second sentence of the third paragraph, it should be 'On the contrary' instead of 'On a contrary.
On the first sentence of the fourth paragraph, the hyphen after 'essay' should also be removed.
Thank you for the introduction letter.
ReplyDeleteIn the letter, the points you shared were concise and understandable.
However, I spotted a few minor mistakes that can be corrected. In the third paragraph, you should have used 'points' instead of point as it had to be in the plural form. In addition, in the last paragraph, you can change "I will be able to strengthen my areas of weakness" to "I will be able strengthen my weaknesses".
Dear Nigel,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the detailed letter. I appreciate the content aligned with the brief and generally clear organization. It's always interesting to me when students recognize the value of 'soft skills', but I would have liked to know which ones (besides language use) you see as necessary.
One skill I see you having potential for is leadership. One area that I hope you adjust in class is your ability to keep focused and not be disruptive to others. If you portray yourself as a leader rather than a joker, you'll be enhancing your own capital, which will serve you in the long run and also enhance the overall class dynamics.
There are some issues with language use with this letter as well. You need to review the following:
-- With these exposures in the industry and a strong interest in technology, it led me to pursue a degree in robotics systems engineering. > (phrasing) Exposure in the industry and a strong interest in technology, led me to pursue a degree in robotics systems engineering.
-- ...which makes it easier for everyone to understand what I am sharing or presenting. On a contrary, I believe ... > (wrong phrase use) which makes it easier for everyone to understand what I am sharing or presenting. At the same time, I believe....
I look forward to working with you further this term.
Cheers,
Brad